It’s pretty good, though some of the lines are delivered kinda akwardly. For instance, “She has danced into the danger zone, when the dancer becomes the dance” just feels wrong, especially with the latter half of the line, and “Touch it, but can’t hold it” doesn’t sound like the actual lyric at all. Additionally, the line “On the wire between will and what will be” shouldn’t have a peak at ‘between will’. But, on the whole, I can get behind this.
7.8/10